美本申请文书范文分享 快来看看他是如何俘获招生官的青睐的

同学们在提交申请材料时也要提交文书，但是很多同学们的文书总是废话太多，让招生官直呼头疼。下面来给大家分享一些美本申请文书范文，看看标准化的美本申请文书该怎么写？

下面这篇是JHU官网给出的一篇优秀文书，文章讲述了一个通过辩论来改善自己的言语障碍，改变了自己内向的性格，并去帮助与自己类似的同学克服障碍的故事。

I looked up and flinched slightly. There were at least sixty of them, far more than expected. I had thirty weeks to teach them the basics of public speaking. Gritting my teeth, I split my small group of tutors among the crowd and sat down for an impromptu workshop with the eighth graders. They were inexperienced, monotone,  and quiet. In other words, they reminded me of myself…

内容赏析：设置hook吸引读者眼球，作者善用情景描写以及抓人的动词来展现细节。

I was born with a speech impediment that weakened my mouth muscles. My speech was garbled and incomprehensible. Understandably, I grew up quiet. I tried  my best to blend in and give the impression I was silent by choice. I joined no clubs  in primary school, instead preferring isolation. It took six years of tongue twisters and  complicated mouth contortions in special education classes for me to produce the forty-four sounds of the English language.

内容赏析：对开头的场景进行解释，一是让读者了解作者的背景遭遇，更能产生共情；二是构建悬念，吸引读者去继续阅读作者会如何行动。

Then, high school came. I was sick of. how confining my quiet nature had become.  For better or for worse, I decided to finally make my voice heard. Scanning the school club packet, I searched for my place. Most activities just didn’t  feel right. But then,  I sat in on a debate team practice and was instantly hooked. I was captivated by how confidently the debaters spoke and how easily they  commanded attention. I knew that this was the path forward.

内容赏析：阐述作者的行动，通过参加学校的辩论社改变自己言语障碍的问题。

Of course, this was all easier said than done. Whenever it was my turn to debate, I  found that I was more of a deer in the headlights than a person enjoying the spotlight.  My start was difficult, and I stuttered more than I spoke in those first few weeks.  Nonetheless, I began using the same tools as I did when I learned to speak all  those years ago: practice and time. I watched the upperclassmen carefully, trying to speak as powerfully as they did. I learned from my opponents and  adapted my style through the hundreds of rounds I lost. With discipline, I drilled,  repeating a single speech dozens of times until I got it right.

内容赏析：用细节说话，作者没有笼统得说经过训练获得了提升，而是具体写出了自己通过模仿高年级学员等方式来练习。

Day by day, I began to stand a little taller and talk a little louder both inside and  outside of debate. In a few months, my blood no longer froze when I was called on  in class. I found I could finally look other people in the eyes when I talked to them  without feeling embarrassed. My posture straightened and I stopped fidgeting around  strangers. I began to voice my opinions as opposed to keeping my ideas to myself.

内容赏析：阐述努力的结果，变得更加自信，面对陌生人也不再紧张。获得初步阶段的胜利。

As my debate rank increased from the triple to single-digits, so too did my standing at  school. I began interacting with my teachers more and leading my peers in clubs. In  discussions, I put forward my ideas with every bit as much conviction as my  classmates. When seniors began to ask me for advice and teachers recruited me  to teach underclassmen, I discovered not only that I had been heard, but that  others wanted to listen. At heart, I am still reserved (some things never change), but  in finding my voice, I found a strength I could only dream of when I stood in silence  so many years ago.

内容赏析：陈述克服了开头的问题后所获得的技能和结果，通过串联其他活动经历进一步说明对自身产生积极影响。

Standing in front of the crowd of students, it was my hope that by founding this  program, I could give them an experience that was as empowering as mine had  been for me. As the weeks passed, the students inched past their insecurities and  towards finding their voices, just as I had always wanted to do. On the last day of  class for that year, I looked up and saw each of the students standing confidently,  equipped and ready to speak their minds in whatever they wanted to do. They had  come a long way from being the shy and stuttering novices that they were just thirty  weeks before—I can’t wait to see how far they can go from here.

内容赏析：进一步展现自己活动的影响力和对整个过程的反思，对文章进行升华，并做到首尾呼应。

这篇文章的结构非常清晰，故事阐述流畅，通篇并没有很复杂的单词，也没有过多的长难句，文字的表达让人感到真实舒服，细节上的流露也更能让人产生共情。

我们发现有好多同学洋洋洒洒写出一篇疯狂自我感动的文书，最终却无法打动招生官而与目标大学擦肩而过。

可能是因为——

过度强调成长反思，而忽略了细节阐述

错误审题，没有理解考官真正的意图

过度的写作技巧，导致缺乏真诚感

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